中考英语书面表达点+例题全面解析12.doc

-中考英语书面体现点+例题_全面解析1

一、中考英语书面体现（含答案详细解析）
1．书面体现
地球是我们家园，我们作为地球主人，就应当好好保护地球。目前正在倡导“低碳”生活，只要我们不污染地球环境，不挥霍地球能源，就可以让我们周围变得更绿，生活变得更美好。作为中学生，我们应当怎样做呢？谈谈你想法。内容应当包括如下几点：
1. 节省用水、用电；2. 节省纸张，循环使用旧书本，保护森林；3. 节省粮食，在更多土地上种树；4. 不乱丢杂物，保护环境；
规定：短文中不得出现真实校名和人名；80词左右
提醒词：the greenhouse gases lifestyle 低碳生活方式
How does our earth turn better?
The earth is our home. _______________________________________________________
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If everyone can make a contribution to our earth, the lift we are living will be better and better.
【答案】How does our earth turn better?
The earth is our home. We should protect our earth as the owner. But how to live in the greenhouse gases lifestyle?
I think as a middle school student, we should save the resources around us, such as the water, the electricity and so on. When you wash, can you close down the water? Can you turn off the lights when you left the classroom? I think saving paper is necessary. All the used text books should be recycled. Thus, less trees won't be cut down again. If we can save more food, the peasants will plant more trees on their farm. Don't throw litter everywhere, it will pollute our environment.
If everyone can make a contribution to our earth, the lift we living will be better and better.
【解析】
【详解】
这篇短文使用了大量固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少，如how to do，live in，around us， such as，as a middle school student，and so on，close down the water，turn off the lights，cut down，make a contribution to our earth，pollute our environment，better and better等。而固定构造But how to live in the greenhouse gases lifestyle?和I think as a middle school student, we should save the resources around us, such as the water, the electricity and so on. /Can you turn off the lights when you left the classroom? / If we can save more food, the peasants will plant more trees on their farm.等复杂从句构造运用，丰富了短文内容，使体现多样化，是本文亮点。在学习中注意总结牢记某些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以合适引用，使文章体现更有逻辑性，也更富有条理。
【点睛】
书面体现题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥作文。它规定将所规定材料内容经整理后展开思维，考察运用所学英语知识精确体现意思能力。因此，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自已熟悉单词、短语和句式，尽量使用高级词汇和较复杂句式构造以便得到较高分数。

2．每一次变化都伴伴随我们成长，作为初中生你，你感觉自已比起小时候有了哪些变化?请写一篇文章描述一下你认为最明显变化。
要点包括: 1. 变化是什么?
2. 变化是怎样发生?
3. 变化后有什么感受?
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【答案】The biggest personal change I’ve ever made is falling in love with rending.
When I was a child, I didn’t enjoy reading books at all. Later, my mother always read stories for me and bought me a lot of books. Gradually I began to love reading. While reading, I feel like I am talking with a wise man. Reading is also a fantastic way to pass my free time.
Books are my friends. They will continue to benefit me even more.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇给材料作文，简介我比起小时候有了哪些变化。
【详解】
结合所给材料，可知本文重要考察一般目前时和一般过去时，人称为第一，三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子构造重要为系表构造和动宾构造，注意某些常见句式应用，例如：When I was……，my mother always read……，Gradually I began to……，Books are……等句式应用。写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意论述次序，符合逻辑关系。
【点睛】
本文构造紧凑，语言简洁。开头简介了我最大个人变化是喜欢上读书，接下来简介我小时候不喜欢读书，最终指出目前书籍是我朋友。此处fall in love in, at all, buy sb sth, begin to do sth, love doing sth, feel like, talk with, continue to do sth等这些词组运用也让文章增色不少。

3．书面体现
同学们，中考后就会迎来漫长暑假了，班会课上老师组织大家讨论假期学习和生活计划。假如你是李华，请根据如下内容提醒用英语向同学们汇报一下你计划。
内容提醒：
暑假计划
学习
博览群书；学习技能 （或自拟一点）
生活
健康饮食；坚持锻炼 （或自拟一点）
其他
热爱公益；亲近自然 （或自拟一点）

注意：
1. 体现中必须包括所给要点，可以合适发挥，不要简单翻译。
2. 词数90左右。开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数。
3. 体现中请勿提及真实校名及姓名。
Dear classmates,
Summer holiday is coming, and here is my plan for it.
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I hope all of you can enjoy the coming holiday. That’s all. Thank you.
【答案】Dear classmates,
Summer holiday is coming, and here is my plan for it.
First, I'd like to choose several good books and read them carefully. This can help me open my mind and learn more about the world. I also think it's necessary for me to learn at least one skill. I'm interested in cooking, so I will learn to cook some delicious dishes during the holiday.
Second, health is the most important. So I will eat healthily and exercise more. I plan to eat more fruit and vegetables and keep running every day.
Third, it's a good idea to join in some charity activities because we should be kind to someone in need. I will pay more attention to protecting our environment so that we can make our Earth a better world. Also, travelling out is a good choice. While travelling, we can be close to nature and learn about different cultures. We have more chances to search the Internet. I know unhealthy websites are harmful to us. I will say no to them.
I hope all of you can enjoy the coming holiday. That's all. Thank you.
【解析】亮点阐明：这篇习作层次清晰，内容饱满，体现流畅。文中使用了非常好短语，例如I'd like to do，help me open my mind，at least，be interested in，during the holiday，plan to do，join in，be kind to someone in need，pay more attention to，be close to nature，search the Internet等。而First, I'd like to choose several good books and read them carefully./ Second, health is the most important./Third, it's a good idea to join in some charity activities because we should be kind to someone in need.等表次序词和综合句式运用，既使短文层次清晰，又丰富了习作内容，使体现多样化，是本文最大亮点。
点睛：书面体现题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥作文。它规定将所规定材料内容经整理后展开思维，考察运用所学英语知识精确体现意思能力。因此，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自已熟悉单词、短语和句式，尽量使用高级词汇和较复杂句式构造以便得到较高分数。

4．书面体现
你即将升入高中，面临寄宿（a boarding school）和走读（a day school）两类学校选择。请你以“A boarding school or a day school”为题。写一篇短文，内容须包括：读寄宿学校利和弊；读走读学校利和弊；你选择和理由（不得与上述两点内容反复）。

注意：1. 词数;100词左右（文章开头结尾已给出，不计入总词数）；
2. 文中不得出现真实姓名、校名等信息；
3. 文章必须包含提醒中所有信息，并按规定合适发挥。
A hoarding school or a day school
We are going to graduate from our middle school, __________________________________
【答案】
We are going to graduate from our middle schools, and we will make a choice to enter a boarding school or a day school. Both kinds of school have their advantages and disadvantages.
If we choose a boarding school, we will save time to study. However, we may have less time to stay with our family. If we choose a day school, parents can know more about our studies. At the same time computer games and TV plays may make a bad influence on us.
As for me, I prefer a boarding school. We should pay attention to our studies to get good grades in the high school.
【解析】
【分析】
整体分析：这是一篇给材料作文。可以分三段写。第一段要写总体交代你即将升入高中，面临寄宿（a boarding school）和走读（a day school）两类学校选择。第二段要写详细论述读寄宿学校利弊；读走读学校利弊。第三段要表述作者自已选择和理由。
【详解】
写作之前要1.审清题目，看看有哪些规定？哪些时态？人称？2.确定文章类型，记叙文？阐明文？议论文？看图？还是应用文？3.确定期态，单一还是混合。4.写下关键词、短语、句型。5.列出提纲和段落，并运用合适句型和过渡词衔接。6.根据提纲和段落构造句型及关键词句完毕文章。写完后反复阅读修改推敲润色，人称、时态、单复数一致等。运用自然过渡法和自然衔接法来是文章更为地道、通顺、纯正。用短语、句型：both kinds of、If we choose a boarding school、At the same time、As for me, I prefer a boarding school、pay attention to、来增长了文章亮点。
【点睛】
此类作文写作措施要注意认真审题，注意过渡性语言使用。做到：要点要全，体现要清晰明确，使用短语，句型要精确，注意避免拼写和语法错误。

5．书面体现
初中即将毕业，同学们都感到压力很大。就此问题，老师规定你在英语课上做一种以“Less Pressure Makes Life Better”为题汇报，谈谈你做法，与同学分享经验。请根据如下规定写一份发言稿，内容包括：
1. 普遍存在压力：同学关系；考试
2. 我过去压力：父母期望；学习
3. 我成功缓和压力措施及效果；……
规定：1. 文中不得出现真实姓名和校名；
2. 词数80左右，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Less Pressure Makes Better Life
Hello, everyone!
Pressure is a serious problem in today’s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. _____
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【答案】Hello, my classmates!
Pressure is a serious problem in today's world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. Some students can't get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.
I was always under pressure, too. My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class. They always sent me to all kinds of after-classes on weekends. 
I had a talk with my parents and told them I had done my best. Finally, they understood me. In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies. 
Less pressure makes better life. Thank you.
【解析】
【详解】
这篇作文规定我们针对目前同学们普遍感到压力大这种现象，以Less Pressure Makes Life Better为题，谈谈自已见解，和同学们分享一下自已经验。审题可知，文章中应重要包括如下几种内容：首先简介同学们普遍感到压力这种现象；然后讲述自已过去曾面对压力；最终简介自已怎样成功缓和压力。题目中只给出了大概提纲，其中详细内容应由学生们自已发挥想象力来补充，并用对英语体现出来。学生们可以从自身经历和体会出发，选用生活中常见场景进行简介。文章应使用一般目前时和一般过去时，注意根据体现需要使用对时态，并变化谓语动词对形式。句式构造可以简单句构造为主，这样句式体现简洁、明了，易于掌握。但为提高作文档次，应穿插使用并列句和复合句，或使用某些复杂构造，如非谓语动词、被动语态等。语句之间使用恰当连接成分，使文意连贯。
【点睛】
这是一篇优秀作文，短文作者根据题目规定，谈了自已对同学们普遍感到压力大这种现象见解，并分享了自已经历。短文有如下几种长处：首先短文内容完整，包含了题目中规定所有信息，且层次清晰，文章提成了四段，每一段中心话题也很明确。另一方面短文中使用了对时态和人称，文章重要使用了一般目前时和一般过去时，谓语动词形式精确。句式构造以简单句为主，论述清晰、简洁。也使用了并列句和复合句构造，如宾语从句、状语从句等。短文中使用了丰富句式，如Some students can't get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.、My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class、In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies等等。

6．书面体现
假如你是华,你英国笔友对中国文化很感爱好,想到中国旅行感受中国文化。你想请他来你家乡一安徴一游,请你根据如下提醒用英文给他写一封电子邮件。
1位置:中国东部,安做省南部:
2.气候:春暖花开,秋季凉爽
3.景点:山和古村落:
4.文化:茶、黄梅戏
5.提议
提醒词:黄梅戏 Huangmei Opera
注意:1.词数80-100
2.可合适增长细节,使行文连贯。
3.文中不得出现自已真实校名和人名
4.开头和结展已给出,不计入总词数
Dear Dave
I know that you are interested in Chinese culture and Im glad you are planning a trip to China. Why not come to Anhui, my home town, to have fun?
【答案】Dear Dave，
I know you are interested in Chinese culture and I’m glad you are planning a trip to China. Why not come to Anhui, my hometown, to have some fun.
Anhui Province lies in the east of China. The best time to come here is in autumn, because it’s really cool and you can just take some light coats. There are many famous places to see. For example, Mt. Huangshan, where you will see wonderful plants and special rocks. Besides, Anhui is also famous for ancient villages such as Xidi, Hongcun and so on. As a fan of Chinese culture, don’t forget to try green tea in Anhui which smells good and tastes better. What’s more, come and watch Huangmei Opera. It’s easy to understand and won’t let you down!
Welcome to Anhui! I’m looking forward to seeing you here!
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【详解】
这篇作文规定我们以李华身份给自已笔友Dave写信，邀请他来你家乡—安徽一游，题目中列出了文章提纲，审题可知，短文应从如下几种内容论述：首先简介家乡位置；然后简介来这里最佳时候；接下来是简介家乡景点和文化，并给出提议。短文应使用一般目前时，注意谓语动词对形式。写作时应合理安排几种内容，分清主次，并注意上下文连贯。此外，英语体现习惯和汉语是不一样，因此写作时不能按照汉语思维逐词翻译，应从句子整体构造出发，写完整句子。如可以使用简单句构造，易于掌握，不容易出错。但为提高文章档次，也应穿插某些并列句构造或复合句，以及使用某些复杂构造，如非谓语动词、被动语态等。
【点睛】
这是一篇优秀作文，短文作者根据题目规定邀请Dave来自已家乡旅游，并简介了家乡景点和文化。短文有如下几种特点：首先文章内容完整，包含了题目中规定所有内容，并对细节进行补充和修饰，使内容愈加充实、丰富。短文先对Dave发出邀请，然后详细简介了家乡位置、景点、文化等，并提出了提议。全文论述清晰，层次清晰，主次分明。第二，短文中使用了对时态和人称，语法规范，用词精确，句式构造完整，符合英语体现习惯。短文以一般目前时来论述，注意了谓语动词第三人称单数形式变化。句式构造以简单句为主，也使用了并列句、宾语从句、状语从句等复合句，尚有某些好句型，如The best time to come here is in autumn, because it’s really cool and you can just take some light coats、Besides, Anhui is also famous for ancient villages such as Xidi, Hongcun and so on.、What’s more, come and watch Huangmei Opera. It’s easy to understand and won’t let you down!、I’m looking forward to seeing you here!等。

7．近来，美国总统特朗普外孙女由于说一口流利中文而成为“网红”。你美国朋友Sam 看过有关报道之后也很想学好中文,不过不懂得该怎样做。假如你是大明，请你根据如下提醒写一封邮件给他,提某些有关怎样学好汉语提议。
要点提醒 :
1.课堂上认真听讲,做好笔记;
2.不要胆怯出错误,与同学们用中文交流;
3.课下常常阅读中文杂志、报纸等,在网上看某些中文语言类节目;
4.常常用中文给外国笔友写电子邮件等。
注意 :
1.词数80-100;
2.可合适增长细节,以使行文连贯;
3.信中不能出现与本人有关信息;
4.开头和结尾已给出,不计人总词数。

Dear Sam ,
I'm happy to hear from you. I know you want to learn Chinese well. Here are some suggestions.
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In a word,if you have good ways of learning Chinese ,you will learn it well.
Yours
Daming
【答案】Dear Sam,
I'm happy to hear from you.I know you want to learn Chinese well.Here are some suggestions.
First, you should listen to the teacher and take notes carefully in class. Second, it's a good idea to talk with your classmates in Chinese. And don't be afraid of making mistakes. Third, you'd better read Chinese magazines or newspapers after class. You can also watch Chinese programmes on the Internet. I think it can help you to improve your pronunciation. Lastly, you can write emails to me or other Chinese friends in Chinese.
In a word, if you have good ways of learning Chinese, you will learn it well.
Yours,
Daming
【解析】
【详解】
这篇作文规定我们以大明身份给Sam写一封信，告诉他怎样学好汉语，题目中从四个方面提出了提议。通过审题可知，这是规定写一封提议信，内容应包括如下几种方面：首先应和Sam先做一种交流，然后引出写信目；接下来给出详细提议，根据题目中给出这四条，用对英语体现出来，还应注意补充某些内容，使文章愈加充实；最终写一种合适结尾，如但愿提议对你有协助等。文章应使用一般目前时，根据体现需要使用恰当人称。写作时应注意英语体现习惯和汉语不一样，不能按照汉语思维逐词翻译，写汉语式英语。应从句子整体构造考虑，写完整句子。如可以较常见主谓宾构造或主系表构造为主，简单句句型可以使文章论述清晰、简洁。为提高文章档次，可以穿插使用并列句或复合句以及其他某些复杂句式。语句之间使用恰当连接成分，使文章意思连贯，体现流畅。
【点睛】
这是一篇优秀作文，短文作者根据题目规定给Sam写了一封信，对他汉语学习提出了某些好提议。首先短文内容完整，包括了题目中规定所有信息。文章重要提成三个部分：第一段是与Sam之间问候以及引出Sam学习汉语这一话题，并简介写信目；第二段中是提出详细提议，这是这篇文章主体，所在篇幅最大。这一段中使用了First，Second，Third，lastly等词，论述条理、有层次；最终一段用一句话对整篇文章做了总结。另一方面短文使用了对时态和人称，句式构造符合英语体现习惯。语法规范、精确，用词得体。文章中语句以简单句构造为主，也使用了并列句和复合句，调整了文章构造。文章中使用了较为丰富短语和句型，如First, you should listen to the teacher and take notes carefully in class.、Second, it's a good idea to talk with your classmates in Chinese、I think it can help you to improve your pronunciation、In a word, if you have good ways of learning Chinese, you will learn it well.等等。

8．书面体现
如下图画展现了林涛和梅梅在公园里发生事情。请用英语写一篇约100词短文。
规定：1.完整论述图画内容。
2.简要陈说你从中学到了什么。
【答案】One day Lin Tao and Meimei were playing in the garden. They found that a young tree needed watering and it was going to die. So they decided to do something for the