广州一模作文.pptx

,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,#,2012,年广州市普通高中毕业班英语测试（一）,第一节基础写作（共,1,小题，满分,15,分）,最近，我们以“,2012,年中学生的春节活动”为题，在,368,名中学生中进,行了一次调查（,survey,）。以下是调查数据：,【,写作内容,】,请根据以上内容用英语写一份调查报告。内容包括：,1.,调查问题及调查对象；,2.,主要活动；,3.,感受及原因；,4.,期望。,【,写作要求,】,1.,只能使用,5,个句子表达全部内容。,2.,文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。,【,评分标准,】,句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。,Recently,we,conducted/did/made a survey among,368 middle school students,on their activities/what they did,during the 2012 Spring Festival.According to the survey,30%of the students,accompanied their parents visiting,relatives and friends,while/whereas,25%,went traveling,with their classmates or parents.,Whats more,45%did their homework at home.Most of them enjoyed the Spring Festival,due to,the lucky money they got,but some of them felt unhappy because they had too much homework to have time for fun.Many students hope that they can be given less homework and more,spare/free time,in future.,第二节 读写任务（共,1,小题，满分,25,分）,阅读下面的书信，然后按照要求写一篇,150,词左右的英语短文。,Dear David,I am writing you this email because youre so busy every day with your studies and,after-school activities,that we seldom have chances to talk face-to-face.There is something that I am very,worried about,.,You have always been an active boy,willing to help others and always looking for an opportunity to try something new or learn something different.I think these are wonderful qualities but I am,concerned,that they may be,affecting your studies,.In the past three months alone you have joined at least four different student clubs.I see these,activities,taking up more and more of your time.Youre always discussing something with your classmates or surfing online.Youre also devoting less time to homework and even your teachers say you are looking very sleepy in class.,I know that these kinds of,activities,are fun and can help your development,but I think they have started to damage your performance at school.Please remember the most important thing at this stage of your life is your studies.Right now you should do your best in your examinations as it will give you more choices is,your future,.I beg you to focus on your main goal and not to throw away all your years of hard work,Your loving mother,【,写作内容,】,假设你是信中的,David,，请用英语,给你妈妈写回信,。以下是回信的内容（信的开头和结尾已经为你写好）：,1.,以约,30,词概括书信的主要内容。,2.,以约,120,词谈谈你对参加学校社团或俱乐部活动的看法，内容包括：,（,1,）你读信后的感受；,（,2,）你是否赞成你妈妈的观点，并陈述理由；,（,3,）你对你妈妈的承诺。,【,写作要求,】,1.,作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接,引用原文中的句子。,2.,作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。,【,评分标准,】,概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。,Summary:,1.Ive just received your email and I knew that you,were worried about,my study because my many,after-school activities,damaged my performance in our school.And you were afraid it would,affect,my future.,2.Ive just received your email expressing your,concern,that I am being distracted from my studies because of my many after-school,activities,and the,consequences,of this for my future.,3.Ive just received your email expressing your,concern,about,my participation in so many after-school,activities,the,effect,of this on my study performance and its,consequences,for my future.),Dear mum,Ive just received your email expressing your,concern,about my participation in so many,after-,school,activities,the,effect,of this on my study,performance and the expectation for my future.,I,appreciate,what you say and am sorry to,have caused you so much worry.,Im also,touched,that you understand my reasons for,being attracted to such activities.,It is true that,I have been spending a lot of time with,these groups but please dont worry.I find that these,groups help me to relax,develop my thinking,and,actually improve my school performance,although my,teacher is right that I do sometimes feel tired in class.,For this reason,and to also,relieve you of,your,worry,I have decided to limit my participation to only,two groups this term.This way,I can still enjoy the,outside activities without,it,affecting either you or my,study performance.,Love,David,从,2012,年广州一模分析,什么因素影响了英语作文得分？,在有限的阅卷时间里，每一个老师在每个考生的试卷上停留的时间非常短，这样并不代表老师会很随便。只是说在很有限的时间内，突显出写作要点对改卷的影响，首先是卷面的印象；第二个是踩点，就是有没有达到要点，这个是绝对重要的因素；第三个是表达正确清晰，要有语言亮点，没有正确清晰的表达作为前提，语言亮点就没有意义了。最后是重点突出，重点突出指的是什么？比如说这次一模的作文写的是对参加学校社团或俱乐部活动的看法，,第一个要点,是你（也就是,David,）看了妈妈的,E-MAIL,的感受，主要为：感激妈妈对自己的关心，让妈妈担心感到很抱歉。,第二个要点,是你是否赞成妈妈的观点，认为应该把时间花在学习上，不要让过多的课外活动影响了自己的学习表现。也就是说，接下来你要陈述的内容为：学习重要，理由是什么？课外活动也很必要，理由是什么？,第三个要点,是，为了不让妈妈担心，你作出的承诺。内容是什么？作为阅卷者来讲更关注这些。要知道阅卷老师重视这几个地方，然后稍微注意一下，可能分数就会有变化，如果你的卷面非常漂亮，那么第一印象的印象分就非常好，假如你的踩点是非常好的话，你的表达基本上也是正确的清晰的，并且你的文章架构非常清晰的话，这个可以叫做稳定的考场高分文章，不管任何老师批改都肯定是第一档次的，到底是,24,分？,25,分？,26,分？这个就难说了，所以作文最后得出的分，可能与同学们平常有几分的差别的话，就不要抱怨了，因为这几分不能代表特别大的意义，可能你前面的试卷特别的好，那么就显得你的弱了，如果你前面的试卷弱，正好你的好一点，那分数也会高。所以大家要跳出自己的角度，能够从阅卷者的角度看看可能给你一点启发。,