中考英语作文叙事记叙文专题复习指导省公开课金奖全国赛课一等奖微课获奖课件.pptx

,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,-,记叙文,(,叙事篇,),中考作文指导,1/60,叙事记叙文写作,主要特点,：,记叙为主,稍加议论,旁带说明或感想,2/60,记叙文,记叙文用于记叙过去发生事件或经历，以写人、叙事为主要内容。它能够包含历史，游记，报道，回想，故事，琐事等。,这么文章也要有中心。普通从第一或第三人称角度出发，表示自己或他人经历或感受，使读者对事情十分明了以取得强烈感受。,记叙文通常以普通过去时为主，依据上下文用各种时态。,3/60,写好记叙文基本要领,1.,头绪分明，脉络清楚,2.,突出中心，详略得当,3.,用活语言，准确生动,4/60,记叙文写作注意事项,一、交代背景,文章开头应概括地介绍事件发生,时间、地点、人物以及事件等,二、详略得当,过多无须要细节会冲淡文章主题。,所以，在细节选择上应注意选择与主题亲密相关,内容，从而点明文章中心。,三、条理清楚,记叙文普通按照时间次序或空间次序来描述，,要求层次清楚、条理清楚。,5/60,中考英语写作评分标准,一档文（,17-20,分）,写出全部内容关键点，层次清楚，,语言流畅，有句式改变，,有复杂结构，最少,2-3,个，,基本无语法错误，只有,1-2,个，,或有少许因为使用复杂结构,而引发语法或拼写错误，,但不影响意义了解。,6/60,How,can we write a,good,composition(,作文,)?,7/60,第一步：,都要,认真审题,，明确写作,体裁,、,要求,和提醒,关键点,How can we,write,a,good,composition?(Have a discussion!),详细做法：,用笔勾画,8/60,假如你是王林。你所在学校“爱心俱乐部,(Helping Hands Club)”,将吸收新会员。你想加入该俱乐部，请依据下面表格和图片内容，用英语写一封自荐信。,姓名,王林,性别,男,本人特点,身体健康；学习刻苦；乐于助人；与同学友好相处,“,爱心”表现,（见图片）,加入目标,1.,2.,例,9/60,要求：,1.,表示清楚，语句通顺，意思连贯；,2.,关键点须包含表格和四幅图片中信息，但不得使用真实姓名和校名等；,3.,表格中“,加入目标,”一栏内容由考生自拟；,4.,词数：,70,左右。,10/60,第二步：,列出写作提要（,Outline,）。,详细做法：,依据段落整理写作关键点,不要遗漏关键点！,11/60,Write an,Outline,Introduction,Main body,Conclusion,I want to join,本人特点,“,爱心”表现,加入目标,看表格,看表格,看图,自拟,I hope you will agree with me.,能够用英文或汉字,姓名,/,性别,易遗漏关键点！,12/60,自荐信,What will you write,？,王林,Who are you in this letter?,人称,:,I,Whats your purpose?,加入该俱乐部,时态：,普通现在时为主,Thinking:,13/60,Dear Chairperson,I am a boy student from Class1 Grade 9.,Id like to join,the Helping Hands Club.,I am healthy.I work hard at my lessons.I like helping others.I get on well with my classmates.,If I join the club,I,will be able to make more friends,.And I,can also,do more for others,.,扣分原因一,词数不够！,14/60,Dear Chairperson,I am a boy student from Class1 Grade 9.Id like to join the Helping Hands Club.,I am healthy.I work hard at my lessons.I like helping others.I get on well with my classmates.If I join the club,I will be able to make more friends.And I can also do more for others.,Introduction,本人特点,加入目标,扣分原因二,遗漏关键点！,15/60,Write an,Outline,Introduction,Main body,Conclusion,I am a boy,Id like to join,本人特点,“,爱心”表现,加入目标,I hope you will agree with me.,无法拿满分！,16/60,Dear Chairperson,I am a boy student from Class1 Grade 9.Id like to be a member of the Helping Hands Club.,I am healthy.I work hard at my lessons.I like helping others.I get on well with my classmates If I join the club,I will be able to make more friends.Besides,I can do more for others.,Yours,Wang Lin,少了,两个,主要部分，扣,5-6,分，只好,11-12,分！,缺乏,“爱心”表现,也缺乏,Conclusion,17/60,“,爱心”表现,(examples),Picture 1,help,with,help,classmates,with,lessons,我,I,often,help classmates with lessons.,看图,18/60,Picture 2,help,cross,“,爱心”表现,(examples),看图,help,old people,cross,the road,I,help old people cross the road,on my way home,.,19/60,Picture 3,“,爱心”表现,(examples),看图,give my seat to,give my seat to,people in need,I often,give my seat to people in need,on a bus,.,20/60,“,爱心”表现,(examples),看图,Picture 4,clean up the park,help,clean up the park,I often,help clean up the park.,21/60,“,爱心”表现,(examples),1.,I,often help classmates with lessons.,2.,I help old people cross the road on my way home.,3.,I often give my seat to people in need on a bus.,4.,I often help clean up the park.,22/60,Conclusion,Ill be glad if I can join the club.,I hope you will agree with me.,23/60,Dear Chairperson,I am a boy student from Class1 Grade 9.Id like to be a member of the Helping Hands Club.,I am healthy.I work hard at my lessons.I like helping others,I get on well with my classmates.If I join the club,I will be able to make more friends.Besides,I can do more for others.,Yours,Wang Lin,Ill be glad if I can join the club.I hope you will agree with me.,and often help classmates with their lessons.On my way home,I often help old people cross the road.On a bus,I always give my seat to people in need.Sometimes,I help to clean up the park.,不但关键点完整了，词数也够了。,24/60,写作：,第一步就是要,认真审题,，明确写作,体裁,、,要求,和提醒,关键点,第二步就是要,列出写作提要,，依据,段落整理,写作,关键点,。,写作前：,确定,人称、时态,写作后：,？,25/60,作文中,应防止,几个常见,语言错误,：,时态错误（扣分多，一个时态错误扣分在,1,分左右）。,中国式英语（不正确英文表示会让,整句不得分,）。,单词拼写错误及大小写（单词拼写一定,要过关,）。,介词,代词，非谓语动词或形容词副词不正确使用（对单词,词性,要,熟悉,）。,名词单复数（,细心,就能够防止错）。,26/60,写作：,第一步就是要,认真审题,，明确写作,体裁,、,要求,和提醒,关键点,第二步就是要,列出写作提要,，依据,段落整理,写作,关键点,。,写作前：,确定,人称、时态,写作后：,检验,27/60,另外,作文中书写不规范，卷面不整齐也是要失分（中考中有,0.5-1,分卷面整齐分,，,不能丢！,）。,28/60,Writing skills,（“写”技巧）,方法一,:,善用词汇,甚至善用,高级词汇,29/60,Which is better?,他们在海滩上听音乐。,A They listened to the music on the beach.,B They enjoyed the music on the beach.,30/60,Which is better?,我希望你能帮助我。,A I wish you can help me.,B Im looking forward to your help.,31/60,Which is better?,他们很早就到了。,A They arrived early.,B They arrived as early as they could.,32/60,Which is better?,最终，他狗得救了，他感到很诧异。,A His dog was saved at last.He was very surprised.,B To his surprise,his dog was saved at last.,33/60,A I think learning English is interesting.,B I find it really fun to learn English.,我认为学英语很有趣。,我们应该保护环境。,A We should protect the environment.,B Its our duty to protect the environment.,34/60,方法二,:,活用各种句型,Writing skills,（“写”技巧）,35/60,她还小，搬不动这么重箱子。,A She is very young.,She cant carry the heavy box.,B She is too young to carry the heavy box.,C She is so young that she cant carry the,D She is not old enough to carry the,36/60,方法三,:,妙用关联词,Writing skills,（“写”技巧）,37/60,1.,表示并列或递进,:and,as well as,bothand,whats more,not onlybut also,neithernor,2.,表示选择,:or,eitheror,3.,表示转折,:but,however,althoughthough,after all,anyway,4.,表示因果,:because,so,therefore,since,for,as a result,5.,表示条件,:if,unless,6.,表示对比,:instead,notbut,while,in the same way,on the one handon the other hand,7.,表示解释,:for example,for instance,such as,that is to say,in other words,to tell the truth,8.,表示次序,:to begin with,firstly,first(of all),second(ly),next,later,since then,from then on,finally,in the end,9.,表示强调,:also,besides,especially,actually,in fact,10.,表示结论,:all in all,altogether,in a word,generally speaking,in short,关联词,(connection words),38/60,Lets try,_ I am tired,I keep on working till midnight.,He didnt go to movies,he went to the concert _.,We like doing kinds of sports _ swimming,running and hiking.,_,he stood up.Then he got out._,he went back._,he smiled.,Though,Although,instead,like,First,Next,Finally,At last,39/60,How do people spend their vacation?We made a survey and here is our report.,According to it,a lot of people travel.,And,some people stay at home.They watch TV or surf the Internet.,Also,some,other people visit friends or parents.,However,a few people work.,Come and enjoy your vacation.People who relax well work well.,连,(connect),40/60,According to it,most people,choose to travel to,get away from the busy world during the holidays,.,Then,some people like to stay at home,watching TV,or surfing the Internet to have a good rest,.,However,a few people,have to,work.,As the saying goes,“All work and no play makes,Jack a dull boy.”,Come and enjoy your vacation.People,who relax well work well.,美,(beautify),And,to,visit friends or parents,also,makes them relaxed,.,Proverb,（谚语）,/saying,41/60,加谚语,(Proverb/saying),可用于”,beginning”,和”,ending”,，多用后者。,42/60,方法四,:,妙用引文和例子（多用于,“,the body,”,）,Writing skills,（“写”技巧）,43/60,青少年应尽我们所能保护环境拯救地球。,We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth.,For example,we can use recyclable bags instead of plastic bags,stop using napkins,plant more trees and save water and energy.,加例子,44/60,加例子,在家里，我经常帮助父母亲干家务活。,I often help my parents do housework,such as,washing dishes,folding the clothes,taking out the trash and so on.,45/60,结尾：感悟体会,46/60,Let,s practice!,47/60,例：请以“,A Visit to a Farm,”,为题，依据提醒写一次愉快参观,48/60,Today we visited a farm.Early in the morning we met at the school gate and went there together.The farm workers gave us a warm welcome.Then the head of the farm,showed us around,.How glad we were to,see,the crops and vegetables,growing,well,！,At noon we had a picnic lunch in the sunshine.After a short rest,we,had great fun,singing and dancing,telling jokes or stories.Two of us even played a game of chess.We,enjoyed ourselves,.The time passed quickly.Before we knew it,we had to say good-bye to the workers.,范文,A Visit to a Farm,49/60,例,A traffic accident,首段：,首段概括交代事件发生时间、地点、人物等信息,A week ago,I,witnessed,a traffic accident in a rainy day on my way to school,which still,sticks in,my mind.,50/60,例,A traffic accident,中心段：,交待细节，重视在,how;,交待细节时应注意事项？,过多无须要细节会冲淡文章主题。,51/60,例,A traffic accident,中心段赏析,It was about 7:00 on Friday morning,(Oct.31st).,（,补充说明时间,）,I was walking through the pedestrian overpass near my school,when I was shocked by the screech of a car,.,（,事情起因,）,I saw a man knocked down by a black car,.Soon many cars were jammed there.I got there and found that,beside a black,Benz,lay a,middle-aged,man in a pool of blood,.,（,交代一些细节,）,The street turned chaotic.,（,事情大致经过,）,After a moment,the police and an ambulance arrived.The victim was instantly sent to the hospital.,（,事情结果,）,注意空间移动：,I got there,52/60,例,A traffic accident,结尾段赏析,结尾段：,可,适当,发表一点议论,In my opinion,the pedestrian should have taken the overpass when crossing the street.Besides,the driver might have driven too fast,regardless of such bad weather.Anyway,I believe accidents may be avoided if we become aware of the importance of safety.,（结尾）,53/60,一档作文鉴赏,Last year,a terrible flu spread across the whole school.,One of,my classmate,John/Jane Doe,became a victim of it.,He/She ran a high fever,and ordinary medicine didnt work on,him.,The news quickly reached everybody in our class.Some,classmates recorded the English lessons for him so that,he/she could keep up with his/her studies.Our English teacher,called on him/her at the weekends sometimes.With care and,help,he/she was soon able to be up and about and finally,came back to the class.,From this event,I learn two things.One is that with love,no,illness or difficulty is terrible.The other is that love and help,are two-way streets.Our classmates offered John/Jane Doe,kind help partly because he/she himself/herself had always,been a helpful person.So I realize that when we help others,we are helping ourselves.,54/60,In the summer sports meeting last year,one of my,classmates,John/Jane Doe,suddenly fell to the ground and,hurt her left foot when he/she was practicing high jump.,His/Her face turned pale and showed great pain.,Seeing this,our classmates immediately came to her aid.,They struggled to take her to the temporary emergency room.,One boy untied his/her shoe and applied ice rocks to his/her,wound.Meanwhile,girls comforted her in a soft voice.Soon,the P.E.teacher came.He checked his/her sound and took,some emergency measures to lessen her pain.Fifteen minutes,later,the ambulance arrived and she was sent to hospital.,Luckily enough,with our care and concern,John/Jane Doe,recovered quickly.,Such an incident impressed everyone present.I realize,that love and care are the best medicine for an injured person,55/60,Last Friday,my classmate John was absent because he,suddenly caught a heavy flu and ran a high fever.,（时间、人,物、事件交代清楚）,After school,we three volunteer students,together with,our class teacher went to see him.John stayed in bed and had,a running nose.He told us that he was anxious about his,studies.On hearing that,we promised him we would try our,best to help.Therefore,in the following days,we arranged,ourselves to teach him every day in turn,hoping to ensure that,he would catch up with us when he came back to school.,（条理,清楚，因果关系合乎逻辑，细节描写恰到好处）,In my opinion,no one is born to live alone.We should love,care and help each other.Moreover,friendship can help defeat,difficulties more easily.,56/60,As old saying goes,“A friend in need is a friend indeed.”It was,such a group of true friends who melted my heart gently and deeply,at one time.,This autumn,I unfortunately came down with influenza because,of not having well prepared for the chill.I kept feeling dizzy and had a,headache accompanied with fever.My classmates and teachers tried,to argue me into taking a good rest at home;nonetheless I was,terribly concerned about missing lessons.They handed me a glass of,hot water,which warmed my heart along with their simple words,“dont worry,my dear,well help you.”,At last,I asked for sick leave for 2 days and got over it soon.With,the earnest aid of my classmates and teachers,I caught up with others before,long.,Do you have such a friend,or are you such a person whos always ready,to offer a helping hand?Only when we realize the meaning of life lies in what,we give rather than what we get will we no longer be lonely in this magical,society.Keep in mind that love is the best policy.,57/60,Tough as the suffering is,we will feel much better when,friends are around us.,One day,when we were playing basketball,an accident,happenedLannes got wrenched in his ankle.From the painful,look on his face,we knew it was serious.Without hesitation,Fenix and I raised him up and helped him walk to the clinic.But,unluckily,the doctor was out.We knew if we didnt take action,at once the injury would get worse.So we placed some cold-,pack on his ankle.Soon after,the doctor came back and gave,us some directions and then we took him to the classroom.,We will never walk alone.Whenever we get hurt and fall,down,there are always friends who will give us a helping hand,by our side.It is friendship that links us together.It is the most,precious fortune in our life.,58/60,One day on a PE lesson,we were enjoying the benign weather,and playing sports on the playground.All of a sudden,we found the centre,of the playground chaotic.When we got there,we were surprised to see,our classmate John lying on the ground with painful expressions.With the,arrival of clinic teachers,the students about were evacuated and John was,instantly sent to hospital.,Because of Johns unexpected illness,my class teacher and all the,classmates were intent on calling on him.After we decided to visit him in,the hospital,some students carried the notes of todays lessons,some,bought what john loved most,others made a card bearing the signature of,every one in class,hoping that he could recover soon.When we saw smile,climbing up to Johns face,we all took an optimistic view of his condition.,Nowadays,more and more people began to have glimmers of hope,about the relationship among the human beings,which is the same to me.,However,the segments of that day frequently floats in my mind,which,changed my opinion of,this kind of circumstance,in society.The reason,why we human beings can“live together”in such harmony along with,creating this prosperous city is that we have the feelings of love.,59/60,组段成篇，,加主题句,审清题意，,构建框架,连词成句，变换句式,抓住关键点，,列关键词,Summary,集句成段，添连接词,誊录规范，,防止错误,60/60,